To make up the previous, grouchy but well-intended post, here's a quick teaser of the new opening of Sublimation after my recent rewrite of the first ~half...
(excerpt from Sublimation, (c) 2010, C. N. Nevets)
“Don't you understand?” His voice was loud over the thrashing water. “You didn't stop to ask questions. You didn't stop to understand. I said get in, and you got in. And now look at what's happening.”
Look? I couldn't see anything but water.
“How does it feel?”
The only thing I could feel was his hand, clutching my head, pressing it under the water, holding it there.
(excerpt from Sublimation, (c) 2010, C. N. Nevets)
For regular teasers, be sure to follow me on Twitter (@cnnevets), where I have recently started the habit of posting a line or phrase of what I'm writing most days that I do write.
Now, we'll see if I can gear up to complete Part I: Evil. One more chapter, per my outline, but the outline greatly predates the Antigone draft of this much-worked book.
.Nevets.
hmm, tempting to go sign up for twitter.
ReplyDeleteBut, I'll wait for the complete postings.
No hurry, go write - I'll wait.
.......dhole
Wow, now look what happened, you post a teaser and say come look and I looked and now I'm curious! Way to go.
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That's a pretty cool opening, Nevets. I love characters that are violent and make it the victim's fault. It's such a fascinating topic to explore.
ReplyDelete@Donna - I'm glad I got your interest at least. I'll have to try and ramp up that impatience somehow . . . hehe ;)
ReplyDelete@Clarissa - Awesome! I'm glad to hear it!
@Domey - Thanks! I agree about the topic. It finds it way with varying expression into a lot of what I write. There's a lot to explore there on both sides of the violence. It's actually been interesting to see how it has developed in Sublimation. It took me a little while to figure out what I was trying to tell myself, and then what that I meant I needed to tell the readers...
Intriguing teaser!
ReplyDeleteIt reminded me of Raymond Carver´s So Much Water so Close to Home (which I hope you see as a compliment :D)
@Dorte - Thanks! That is a great compliment!
ReplyDeleteVery different than the previous beginning you posted. I like how it's brief but already begins to dig its hook into you.
ReplyDelete@Aidan - Yeah, most of the original beginning is gone, and the rest of it moved later. It's a completely different start to the novel now. lol
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